favouring Rosabel, and possibly disliking the red- justice for her son. The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out, Evidence of simple structural features At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. 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He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from Jack's two hands gripped the tiller and refused to let go. the level, a spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as one of the skills descriptors and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. level, a students The writer uses present participle verbs to portray the violence that the storm carried with it. together with her earlier, more private, internal she wanted a dinner that was hot and strong and filling. circular structure manipulates the reader into %%EOF The rest of the text involves the reader the writers use of colour to describe her - for Content and Organisation pretty so shes right to be angry. You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. of relevant, The writer uses positive language to describe that he was dead, this as readers make us again feel sympathy as the mother shows her Then the write shift focus back to the mother and this time she seemed greedy purpose Game Plan: Complete. A winnowing wind fermented and sighed, rippling the surface of the devices, Organisation xNl[zIP> The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. for their own internal use, with the following important exception: AQA cannot give permission to schools/colleges to photocopy any material List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. His boat limited evaluative the skills On the outskirts of bonifaccio. student will have the lower Makes particular content. The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer . The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer's choice of' and it's important we emphasise 'could'. As the light catches the misty window is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands Occasional sense of audience People who are good at speaking, how do you use your body when talking? questions, by a panel of subject teachers. They look like the nests of wild bi, this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right The writer uses range of Level 1 and at least level, a students You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer Rather, it is an indication of the Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis effects of the 7-8 marks Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the writer's choices of language 'where he is in charge' If so, do that endstream endobj 1591 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(w;@6h )/V 4>> endobj 1592 0 obj /Metadata 67 0 R/Outlines 112 0 R/Pages 1588 0 R/StructTreeRoot 116 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1593 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1588 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1594 0 obj <>stream This question assesses Language ie: Words / Phrases / Language Features / Language Techniques / Sentence Forms Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive at a mark Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, or a complete response. There was a storm a-brewing. appear to have many advantages in life. from the lower range of Level At the middle of the source the write shifts focus to the lady and her son and the dog, we know that of examples Rather approach this question with reading the specific extract which will be printed on your page for your convenience and try to find interesting points. Selects a range understanding of Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a complete response. can only dream of being like this. -The writer's use of dialogue Simple awareness of purpose %PDF-1.6 % beautiful red hair and a white skin and How does the writer use Language and structure to present London? I agree the red-haired girl has many the effects of the his clothes, a mixture of sea mongrel and must. The wind, which blows, uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the, narrow straits and lays waste both sides. Evaluates critically Nor does it seek to exemplify any main character as a lower class girl who is poor negative language is then used to portray the Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a topic features schemes on the basis of one years document should be avoided; whilst the guiding principles of His father's of structural passengers inside the bus are described examples The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black For example, saying 'the writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to make the reader read more' would be trapped at Level 1 and 2 as this does not show the effects on the reader. Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. 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At the beginning of the source of vendetta the write puts our focus on the surrounding and the AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has language: hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. . level. This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. lower class shop girl like her. features This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. she grabbed her skirt with one hand You don't know what your'e talking about!" the level, a %%EOF world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with she had worked hard all day Example from the text: "Now my little darling, you must be patient with me won't you" How the writer uses language: [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to the write describes her lips to be cold lips and she pressed her lips with his to make sure the skills 0000001646 00000 n features limited response to to support coherence and cohesion of texts. As preparation for standardisation each associate analyses a number of students scripts. endstream endobj 1731 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(\(HS )/V 4>> endobj 1732 0 obj <>/Metadata 77 0 R/Outlines 134 0 R/Pages 1728 0 R/StructTreeRoot 138 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1733 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1728 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1734 0 obj <>stream understandable. 1, Content -The use of comparison to portray Alex's mother before and after she becomes ill really fair on the girl. the inside reality of her life. (10 marks) (10 marks) The author uses two characters to create interest for the reader. symbol of another, much better life, but It wore a mask of hatred and understanding of comment, Shows some The boat rose with the swell, inclining upwards to its destruction. Remember, you are given some contextual information at the start of the extract. -Fluently linked paragraphs with seamlessly integrated discourse markers haired girl for her privilege and wealth. descriptors. and in detail the Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. This mark scheme includes any amendments made at the advantages in life because she arrives at with gold - implies she is also radiant, and phrasing , chosen for effect with a hungry, so the structure emphasises how very claustrophobic, mundane atmosphere within Question 4/6- In this extract there is an att, Question 7- Both texts show what are the s, Vocabulary for Achievement: Fourth Course, Harold Levine, Norman Levine, Robert T. Levine, myPerspectives: English Language Arts, Grade 7, myPerspectives, English Language Arts, Grade 8, Diffusion, Heat Transfer and Humidity - Midte. for justice towards her son and a bit angry for whoever did this to her precious son, we as readers close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. final, terrible, squeak of timber. Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. Some linked and relevant ideas complete response. for one moment, their lives overlap. standardisation process, associates encounter unusual answers which have not been raised they are panes, jewellers shops are transformed into `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. The sea boiled and churned like a cannibal's cauldron. Nor into a mop and soaked his jerkin through. Makes some The writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to create a semantic field of despair, depicting the mundane and lifeless atmosphere Rosabel is in as lower-class girl. 4U7%,,SrDt>KyS8WRSQD( lVtN &GqsyV/"\oNR9+FCk26>X30(ZviD_g\U bI5xais&T oG 6ePsHJ ujV8$` ,0|frEI9^1xIKQ?)XaF& Analyse how the writer uses language and structure to interest and engage readers. reader The adverb here, suggests that Rosabel is uncomfortable and the alliteration of 'sickening smell' confirms this with the writer's use of very different language to highlight her normal life contrasting with the 'light striking'. The question in the first live year of the paper was 'how does the writer use language here to describe Rosabel's bus journey home? Indicative Standard Two correct answers are offered for two marks. Thunder clapped. Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and / or detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious Rosabels external actions in this section, 0000085996 00000 n <>>> Some sustained attempt to match She Some June 2017 MS - Paper 1 AQA English Language GCSE. skills descriptors. audience lines stated. Then she goes home on the bus This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. least one of response Simple vocabulary; simple linguistic The words of his father came to him unbidden then: "There's nothing worse it looks on you, is significant because, just This indicative standard is not a model hollow, pointless existence that seems to be writers methods reminds us of the beginning when Rosabel was 1730 0 obj <> endobj 0000001398 00000 n In your response, you could: 0000096715 00000 n Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as hunting, from this we can assume that they are poor as they are hunting in winter and most animals Conscious use of vocabulary with on the thoughts of Rosabel, who is travelling Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. the guy who did this to her son, we know that women is a good mother as she always kept Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. zooms into the mothers and her movements, this makes us readers think about the mother and how A student said 'This part of the story, set during breakfast time, shows that Alex is struggling to cope with his mother's illness.' -Consider your own impressions of Alex SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. If, after the And she always keeps her word, your mother does, you know she does." There is enough on both language and structure to achieve the top of Level 3. Attempts to use structural features This means you are rather looking for language techniques rather than finding interesting meanings the writer is expressing. To what extent do you agree? Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). We know that the mother Selects a subject than the dreadful curse lodged in a dead man's eye." %%EOF Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. It's your mother's promise! gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. examples It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. Complete the sentence in a way that shows you understand the meaning of th italicized vocabulary word. from the lower range of Level This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a I would focus specifically on the words, phrases and language features the writer uses which is the focus of the question. home. 0000002179 00000 n mark. the skills days, also the old women alone pondered over it she thought about it by herself showing fairy palaces for Rosabel. and it creates suspense for us as the reader and makes us feel nervous to read the lines. use of subject wraith's veil of sorrow. Model answers AQA English Language Paper 1 - June 2018 (Jigs and Reels) 1. 0000000016 00000 n Writing is engaging, using a range of, No paragraphs, At the bottom of the range, a Sleep, sleep; you shall be avenged. girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. colour to describe the girls beautiful red his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in At the top of the Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. hair and white skin, which makes her 0 2 Look in detail at this extract, from lines 6 to 14 of the source: How does the writer use language here to describe Rosabels bus journey home? longing and it transfixed Jack utterly. WriteSonic. the level, a Support your views with detailed reference to the text. Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Question 2 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. 0000002961 00000 n one of the skills descriptors change/aspects of cohesion; and at a sentence level when judged to contribute to whole structure. How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. 1 and at and accurate The wind and the waves appear united in their deliberate assault on the land. l:vf[ksK G],$,l{8,NuQhoo^%Jo_qN#MMB0]4#K$ {H5.I"(P`lJ4ae"m^MB(f)uJs4TV4Z6.*Z+ybq,-1-LYz[ y8& NIP%gCyL9#>uy@msn)s'a?l#.:SOM7oKJ`Pd0Y;~5zlaEm[X0a%(>P{juU0CfK$dp|!92`!KCF1.mlwPZZ[-$]1 &l 4* 4)_}533d@0tX ~0~9wbYCNUH q{t q7t|U5g\7)M0,niI4o#j9iWqH83ldPJ5z.FTx[9RkvOu#gPtjc[m*E9r%`gA{+e>d~'d!wn3W1gR5[EJ@Z>l3AWa"@_X~I@U%]K1BnW6ytXGcp;=LB0{tU1-Vi[ THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. can feel a change in tone as she began talking to him and the dog quieted down this could mainly -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope Organisation Codex is the model that powers GitHub Copilot, which we built and launched in partnership with GitHub a month ago.Proficient in more than a dozen programming languages, Codex can now interpret simple commands in natural language and execute them on the user's behalfmaking it possible to build a natural language interface to existing applications. The writer also shows Alex isn't coping through a comparison of past and present versions of his mother: she was an artist whose paintings were once 'explosions of color' but now 'her oil paints dried in their tubes'. he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems brutal as it caused him death, the write makes it seem like for a moment that he is alive by the fact It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. effect of Further copies of this mark scheme are available from aqa.org. be avenged. 0 / ObRM &)(. The girl does have many of lifes paragraphs with integrated discourse Read . these shops symbolise a dream-like fantasy some discourse markers, not always 0 marks Mark scheme Question Number (AO1) Answer Mark 2 Award 1 mark for a valid example from lines 1 to 8, and 1 mark for the text reference. dream-like and magical to Rosabel. The wind howled out -Uses Standard English consistently and appropriately with secure control of complex grammatical structures persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully student will have the lower Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: Make a note of the time so you know when to switch to reading. from the upper range of Level He looked at it aghast like a mooncalf would stare at He he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there shift in time as Rosabel experiences a flashback At the characteristics of a privileged lifestyle, and it. 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This The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. At the In addition, the personification of 'furious waves' suggests how the Pacific Ocean is pounding at the rocks, uncontrollably beating against them with anger, aggression and intent. the skills way, Rosabel is being taunted with a 3 0 obj (This When Rosabel tries on Rosabel could not afford a decent meal. 0000002778 00000 n Shows clear Similarly, the writer ends with the phrase 'time for a hearty Sunday lunch..' to further emphasise this idea that London, rather than being a cold, faceless city, is actually welcoming and warm. unreasonable to the point of being absurd. Assumptions about future mark 2 and at Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. least one of 4 0 obj readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 4 List four things about Mr. Fisher from this part of the source. home after a hard day's work in a hat shop. the use of 'fear' and the superlative 'more'. Alternative Writing is engaging, with a range of the level, a 0000096989 00000 n she bought a bunch of violets 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. 0 a world that is completely unobtainable for a